Class feedback.

Positive:
-The non diegetic sound of the reports are very good
-Effects are amazing really well done and adds to the feel that is being created by the voiceover, mysterious and unknown
-Really good effects at the start and i love how you did the titles it goes well with the sequence
-The music was dramatic and had a good pace to it. I liked the idea of using voice overs of different people it made it confusing in a good way but linked it so well.
-Voice over added sense of reality to the opening.
-I liked the overlapping of different scenes to distort the overall appearance, it is good at drawing in the audiences attention in order to find out what happens next. the narrative  voice of the news woman is affective and creates tension.
- i liked the sound effects of the news report they were effective.
- good music, good location i like the effects throughout the clip and good use of the public
-voice overs fit in well with the music
- really nice distorting effects
- effective makeup
- i loved the effect during the titles
- you've done a really good job of making her appear
- the location are really good
- the voice over sounds really good giving a news report feel and the way it was all in black and white gave a really nice feel.
- Good use of non diagetic sound
- Good editing has been used
- The shots used worked well, especially the shot at the front entrance.


Improvement:
- the sound drags on and is repetitive also it gets to a point where there are too many effects.
- there is too much diagetic sound as well as the non diagetic sound of the news report
- not a great use of different camera shots
-the different shots layered were a little bit too much maybe use less shots to layer.
- the disorientated/ blurred effect was effective but i felt it dragged on a bit
- it wasn't specific to what the story line was perhaps an improvement would be a clearer story line however it gets the audience thinking which is good.
- better makeup?
- narrative is unclear
- music is repetitive
- music goes on for too long it would be better if there was some ambient sound.
- i didn't like the soundtrack as it got really repetitive quickly
- Doesn't give a clear understanding of what is going on.
- Voiceover is too quiet
- It is not too clear who are the main character(s) that are introduced, which is what an opening sequence is meant to do.

Screen Pane

Here is our screen pane, 9 images to demonstrate our thriller opening:



From Left to right - Top  row first:
1. Lighting - Here is a good example of how we used all natural lighting around dusk, to convey the mysterious atmosphere.
2. Props - A close up of our key prop, the umbrella, which is significant to our missing person although it is unexplained why. She holds this throughout even though it is not raining and it is always marks the place where she was spotted.
3.  Locations - A clear establishing shot which captures the sign "Grand Arcade" tells the audience where we are, as well as letting them recognize it is set in Cambridge. There is an equivalent sign in each establishing shot.
4. Camerawork 1 - A long shot of our protagonist sat on a bench, it is also slightly out of focus due to the overlapping. Putting her in this ordinary situation and observing her, highlights the extraordinary circumstances.
5. Costume - A profile full body shot of our protagonist in all black helps her to blend in to the dark mise en scene and the mysteriousness, a dress; leggings; gloves and trainers. This helps to reinforce her age and vulnerability, playing off stereotypical images of women. the make up along with the costume is dark showing bruising and again in keeping with the sinister atmosphere.
6. Camerawork 2 - Contrasting, a close up of our protagonist holding the umbrella inside. Zooming in on her allows us to begin to see her bruises etc on her expressionless face.
7. Titles - Over this long shot of just the umbrella, you can see how we added our titles and with what font: Rough typewriter - creating a newspaper article effect - in keeping with the theme of our voice over. They flicker and fade in and out, mirroring our protagonist.
8. Thriller conventions 1 - A close up of our protagonist with other passers by fading in and out around her; suggests the theme of identity, as we know nothing about her, but people continue to walk by without paying any attention. She is unnoticed amongst the crowd.
9. Thriller conventions 2 - Being shown some bruising on her face, hints at the crime that is at the centre of our narrative. We also begin to see our protagonist experiencing some form of peril.

Thriller Final

Here is our completed thriller opening sequence:

Here is a screen grab of how our project looked in Final Cut. This gives some indication of the process we went through to create our thriller opening: 

Rough cut

Here is our rough cut:

Filming

We filmed over two nights. The first time we filmed the costume and makeup weren't put on, so the footage didn't look as good as the standards we set ourself in the planning stage. although the footage itself was of good quality and we finished all the filming in one night, we decided to use the other night we had to film again with all of the costume and makeup.
when filming we didn't have much trouble with people in the public disrupting the filming although in some clips some people are looking directly at the camera. if we had time to film this again and use people we knew so that this would not happen and it would look more realistic.
Filming outside around Cambridge was very cold and so we were glad of the tripod to hold the shots steady, however we had to make a couple of attempts at the end pan, as this was very difficult to get smooth. The one used in our rough cut and final opening sequence was the best out of 3.
In all, our filming was pretty quick to do as we had planned well. It only took us an hour and a half out of lessons the second time round; and 20 minutes or so within a lesson to film.  Also our shots were not too complex to shoot and as it is a repetitive sequence,  once we had done it once we knew what we were doing.
Thanks to the preliminary task, we already knew how to use the new HD camera's and this allowed us to get straight on with filming, making efficient use of our time.